Email subject header: Mechanical Designs Engineer Position Application
September 10, 2011
Teh Xiaowen Noelle
123 Pet Avenue
Singapore 123456
+65 98765432
noelleteh@email.com
Dear Hiring Manager,
I am expressing my interest in the above mentioned position as advertised online at Jobstreet.
I will be graduating from National University of Singapore (NUS) with a degree in Mechanical Engineering and a specialization in Product Design come May 2012, thus I believe I possess the necessary product development knowledge, innovative design skills and enthusiasm to be a Mechanical Design Engineer in your company.
In the course of my study at NUS, I have gained relevant knowledge and skills in mechanical designs and processes, product management, and 3D modeling with SolidWorks. My previous coursework projects include conceptualizing and designing an electric bike for urban use, and designing and prototyping a grocery trolley which doubles up as a walker for the elderly. For my degree dissertation, I am currently working on the design of a rotator cuff spacer for an orthopedic surgeon at National University Hospital. To ensure its feasibility, I modeled the spacer using Mimics (a medical modeling software) to produce prototypes for testing and ran simulated tests to analyze the stresses and mechanics involved.
Furthermore, I have successfully led and managed committees in organizing youth camps, and have achieved several awards representing NUS in sports. These accomplishments demonstrate the importance of team spirit, cooperation and enthusiasm for success, and I believe that I can bring these qualities to your company.
In review of Novo Design’s objectives to generate unique and iconic design whilst leveraging on engineering and technology, I feel that my strengths and skills will be an asset to the company. I am eager to speak with you to discuss the possible contributions that I can bring to your company. I can be reached in confidence at any of the above contact information. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Ms Noelle Teh
Link to job advertisement: http://www.jobstreet.com.sg/jobs/2011/8/default/20/2697936.htm?fr=J
Hi Noelle,
ReplyDeleteIs there a link to the advertisement that you could put on your post?
The cover letter sounds very confident, especially the last 2 paragraphs :))
Hey, I have added in the link to the job advertisement already! Thanks :)
ReplyDeleteLike Klara, I really liked the way you tied your co-curricular success to your values om the last 2 paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteThe use of 'furthermore' as a paragraph starter is really powerful as it keeps the reader engaged and compelled to read on. It's like saying "there's more to me!", and it really does a good job of breaking up a lengthy paragraph. Good job!
Hello Noelle!
ReplyDeleteYour application letter is really good! If you submit this for real, I think you have a good chance of getting called up for an interview.
Basically, you were very confident throughout the letter and managed to bring in points which the employer required. You addressed their requirements well when you stated clearly about your experience in certain designing software and what were your past projects.
*Maybe you missed out on a punctuation? Not sure if its reflected on the actual Word Document you are working on. Just in case, it is between 'National University Hospital' and 'To ensure your feasiblity...' at the 2nd paragraph. :)
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Hi Noelle,
ReplyDeleteI think your application letter is really good!
In the second paragraph,your focus on your academic achievements,and your turn to your social experience in the next paragraph.That's pretty coherent!
What's more, you mentioned the company's objectives,which shows you did your homework before you apply for the job!I think you show your confidence throughout your application letter!
And I also notice that you may miss something in the third paragraph?
"at National University Hospital To ensure its feasibility", it may have a punctuation there?